This is just a cool quote about birthdays! It made me laugh! =)
Birthdays are good for you. Statistics show that the people who have the most live the longest.
–Larry Lorenzoni-
Author's Note: Its my moms birthday, so I wrote this about birthdays, and moms.
Happy Birthday
Have you noticed
You get all attention
love
On your birthday
Your birthday
You’re the main character
We never remember
To show the correct thanks
Honor
Throughout the year
Before-after
You’re a side character
A birthday is an annual reminder
To honor your life
A major part in mine
Your support
Your attention
Your time
Without,
we wouldn’t have
Have you noticed
We wouldn’t get places
Stuck
Going nowhere
Your birthday
We are happy to be stuck
We never remember
We signed up for your team
First
Before all else
Practice-game
Coaching us through
Every game you set it, I’m the champion
To let me shine high
When you’re the real hero
You start it
You set it up
You get it going
so it,
plays out for me
The love, attention
I always get
Bounces back, for you
For you to be in
The spotlight
That you should always be in
I especially enjoyed the second poem. As a poem, it worked the best. The words you decided to isolate are interesting, and worked for you. The theme is sweet, of course, and those sort of poems can be the most difficult to write for fear of being banal, or trite. You avoid that trap really successfully. Well done. Keep writing poetry, as you have a real talent for it.
ReplyDeleteI really like it. It's really unique and what you're saying is really true to. I also like how you isolated a couple words and how they went so well with the lines before and after them.
ReplyDeleteThat was a very good poem, I liked the message in it and liked the format you placed it in. You are an accomplished poet.
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